俳句 Revision

前回の時間, 私は音節を使用した。でも、今、私はモーラを使用した！

Translations:

Beautiful fields,
to ki , I run,
The sound of spring.

Fiery ball,
kan, I become slower,
I/Sun (ambiguous) become red.

The tree's falling leaves,
waku, I run up,
A tender breeze.

Heaven crystals,
The body fights,
zai, to continue (ambiguous whether it's snow or the person continuing!)